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Post by Lolli on Jan 12, 2012 20:47:21 GMT
Okay, finished it.
Gotta say, you know you've done a good job when you inspire others to write. And I am inspired. Really. I've been bitten by the story bug now.
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Post by Sindaiin on Jan 14, 2012 15:42:35 GMT
Why thank you. What'd you think of my plot twist? (Referring to the discovery after the carousel.)
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Post by Lolli on Jan 15, 2012 13:48:47 GMT
You mean the bit where Heather is God? It was beautifully done. I particularly liked the part where you made each incarnation of Heather a part of the true God. I'd also like to say that the part where Vincent is getting strangled reminded me a lot of Star Wars. Inappropriate I know, but I had visions of Vader force in my head ;D
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Post by Sindaiin on Jan 15, 2012 14:17:45 GMT
Yaaayyy! I pulled it off! A piece of me was like "Maybe that's a bit much...." I'm glad it all worked out. Thank you for reading!
I have to admit I thought of that too after I read it for my first draft. Vader basically trademarked all choke holds.
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Post by Lolli on Jan 19, 2012 17:28:22 GMT
Ha ha, totally.
But you did a very good job on that part of the story. It actually tied up all the loose ends connected to those characters. Made them less, throw away, if that makes sense?
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Post by Sindaiin on Jan 19, 2012 20:57:13 GMT
Ah, yeah. I totally get what you mean.
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